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  • Brenna: Hey, Arcadians! I started a community on plug.dj for us. Think of it as a chatroom with a jukebox we can all take turns using. Whip up an account and let me know your account name (it's a private room).
    July 02, 2015, 04:14:52 PM
  • Brenna: I'm still here! Waiting... *hopeful*
    June 30, 2015, 02:26:07 PM
  • Edgewise: ;_; Thank you, very much.
    May 25, 2015, 08:27:28 PM
  • Alyss: I hope not!
    May 21, 2015, 03:32:13 PM
  • Edgewise: ...Please tell me this rpg hasn't been abandoned for the second time in six years. Please.
    May 18, 2015, 08:21:36 PM
  • Edgewise: Omg stay warm, everybody!  ;__;
    November 19, 2014, 01:00:04 PM
  • Ingrid: Maybe when they were kids XD
    October 19, 2014, 12:15:33 PM
  • Alyss: Phoebe wouldn't want Vaness to feel bad either, though, or dress up as something she really, really would rather not wear. Rapunzel and Sleeping Beauty have pretty dresses, so she'd be perfectly happy going as one of them. ^_^ (And the puppy dog eyes may end up on Roi to go as Flynn. XD)
    October 17, 2014, 01:04:57 PM
  • Alyss: She does - complete with a little bottom lip wibble. ^^;
    October 17, 2014, 12:59:37 PM
  • Ingrid: I bet Phoebe has the best puppy eyes
    October 17, 2014, 10:40:58 AM
  • Ingrid: Oh no ;_; Now Vaness feels bad
    October 17, 2014, 10:40:49 AM
  • Alyss: Phoebe would probably go as Rapunzel or Sleeping Beauty since they are both "hidden" princesses like her. (But only because Vaness probably won't go as Elsa to her Anna. XD)
    October 17, 2014, 10:35:10 AM
  • Brenna: Phia will dress as a butterfly, because its the last thing anyone will see coming out of the world's biggest tomboy.
    October 14, 2014, 10:54:38 PM
  • Brenna: Doc Lamya would go as the Ghost of Breakfasts Yet To Come, with a bacon and eggs print shroud.
    October 14, 2014, 10:53:31 PM
  • Ru: That is so awesome.  :D
    October 14, 2014, 06:06:48 PM
  • Pixie: Kivan would go as Liberace XD
    October 14, 2014, 05:50:22 AM
  • Ru: Kit I think might be a total geek and dress up as some historical figure her dad taught her about.  And then be a little confused that no one knows who she is.
    October 13, 2014, 06:52:34 PM
  • Ru: Hmm, I think Seren might go as a zombie, just to confuse the hell out of people.  She'd play it totally straight, and people would STILL find her attractive.
    October 13, 2014, 06:50:57 PM
  • Ingrid: Vaness goes as Flame Princess because of all the Elsa jokes
    October 13, 2014, 01:51:42 PM
  • Pixie: Pwyll would perversely go as his sister XD
    October 13, 2014, 07:05:13 AM
  • Brenna: Autumn Question Times! Cast Masquerade/Trick or Treating! What/Who/When is your character going as?
    October 11, 2014, 08:50:34 AM
  • Ru: Excellent, okay!  <3
    October 06, 2014, 06:36:01 PM
  • Brenna: Triso probably did. Seraita wasn't strong enough to swim, so she mostly waded.
    October 01, 2014, 01:59:40 PM
  • Ru: HEY so just a little question - for those of you with Lost Kids, do your kids know how to swim?
    September 25, 2014, 06:10:07 PM
  • Ingrid: Thank you <3
    September 23, 2014, 09:33:18 AM
  • Edgewise: More. Draw moarr
    September 20, 2014, 07:30:58 PM
  • * Edgewise is late to the party, as usual
    September 20, 2014, 07:30:31 PM
  • Brenna: Oh, how luscious!
    September 17, 2014, 04:28:14 PM
  • Alyss: Please do! :)
    September 15, 2014, 01:47:31 PM
  • Ingrid: Okay, mind if I improvise?
    September 15, 2014, 01:46:04 PM
  • Alyss: And I've been trying to find a good flower for Phoebe. I've come up with a few (white rose, lily of the valley, magnolia, etc), but haven't settled on one yet.
    September 15, 2014, 01:02:17 PM
  • Alyss: Pretty! :)
    September 15, 2014, 01:00:15 PM
  • Ingrid: I redrew Daki because reasons
    September 15, 2014, 11:58:03 AM
  • Ingrid: [link]
    September 15, 2014, 11:57:55 AM
  • Ingrid: Does Phoebe have a specific symbolic flower?
    September 15, 2014, 10:50:03 AM
  • Ingrid: Thank you :D
    September 14, 2014, 08:07:45 PM
  • Alyss: Yay for Ingrid arts! <3 They are awesome! ^^ <3
    September 14, 2014, 05:14:20 PM
  • Ingrid: Thank you <333
    September 14, 2014, 08:41:51 AM
  • Pixie: OMG those are awesome! <3
    September 14, 2014, 06:07:41 AM
  • Ru: And Daki is all sorts of gorgeous, and I love her hidey bangs.
    September 14, 2014, 05:03:13 AM

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Questions / Re: Review our review system!
« on: December 19, 2013, 09:12:24 AM »
While I agree that a week is a good turnaround, it does make me worry about things like holidays, especially the long winter holidays.

For example, maybe extending it to two weeks if there are reasons to believe reviewers might be delayed, like New Year's or a 3-day weekend?

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Questions / Review our review system!
« on: December 17, 2013, 09:01:56 AM »
Hi ya'll!

So we've had about 4 apps go through our Google Forms based review process (half of them being Ru, so thanks to her for being a good sport).  I think this is a good time to ask for feedback on how you feel about the process, both as a reviewer and as someone who is being reviewed. 

Some sample questions, though feel free to comment on whatever you want:

- Is one week an appropriate turn-around time?  Is it enough time for reviewers to respond to an app, and is it a reasonable amount of time for an applicant to wait?

- Are the posted reviews effective?  Does it help to see the quotes?  Would reviewees rather see the whole review?

- Is Google Forms an appropriate template for reviews?  Are all of the questions appropriate? 

One change I will definitely make is making it so that reviewers can look over the reviews that other people have made so far.  I made it blind initially so that people won't be influenced by each other, but it seems like it will be far more valuable to reviewers to know what ground others have covered. 

As always, if you would rather keep your comments confidential, send me or Brenna a note!

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Application Reviews / Re: Sailor Quartz//Dr. Lamya bint Sullivan
« on: December 17, 2013, 08:53:40 AM »
Quartz is in!  Everyone give her a big warm welcome!

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Application Reviews / Re: Sailor Quartz//Dr. Lamya bint Sullivan
« on: December 14, 2013, 11:46:17 AM »
Thank you!  I'll review over the weekend and get back to you, and be sure to message me if you have additional questions!

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OOEY CHEWY REVIEWY TIME

Reviewers thought that Gluttony was handled in a clever way - instead of tackling it the obvious way, or ignoring it, Dany's use of toxicology and botany is something I certainly wouldn't have thought of myself.  Everyone loved her appearance, as we have nobody in the cast who looks like her, and she is still beautiful and charming in her own right (which is what Sin cares about the most).  Also the Sweeties are devilish and great (and actually remind me a little bit of Ursula's "poopsies" from the Little Mermaid XD). 

The core of Quartz as a character checked out - everyone liked the concept of her character and her personality, and a lot of the fun tidbits (her style and the Sweeties especially).  She is vivacious and lively, which is the part I like the best.  But there were a lot of questions and clarifications that came up. 

There were three major points that reviewers asked about, which I'll summarize here:

1) How did Dany, a human, manage to kill an Iron Angel?  It is known that they are much stronger than normal humans, so Dany being able to bash one to death seems unlikely.  Was the Iron Angel already damaged?  Did Dany use a clever trick to pull off the kill, like electrocution or an acid?  The way I read the history, it seemed to me that the Iron Angel kind of wanted to kill herself, so did she make it easy for Dany to kill her?  We need some clarification on how Dany managed to do this because it shouldn't be too easy to kill an Angel, otherwise the Resistance would have won by now. 

2) It seems really unlikely that Sin would allow an Iron Angel to walk around with such a major weakness to photosensitivity.  While it makes for a good weakness, and relevant to her sphere, it should be toned down.  One idea is that her camouflage doesn't work in direct light, or maybe her special skin gives off an unnatural glint when she is in direct light, indicating to people that she isn't human (just a Twilight vampire).  That way she still hates the sun and it is a disadvantage to her, but won't totally damage her. 

3) Quartz's mission as an Iron Angel seems a bit confused.  Reviewers weren't exactly sure how Quartz serves Sin's mission, and didn't think the language fluency was enough to make Sin think "I need to have this woman by my side!".   I think the easiest way to fix this is to simply swap the "Poisoning" hobby with the "Walking Babelfish" special quality.  While knowing lots of languages is useful in social situations, Sin will really find Dany valuable as a toxicologist, especially if Sin is aware of Dany's history as a poison assassin (would Sin have found out that Dany was behind those?).  Plus, Quartz seems to shine the best as a loving mad scientist, so she should focus a little on that.

(The languages part could be useful in conjunction to Lapis's hacking ability, so perhaps they work together sometimes to bring down big Resistance communication lines.)


Here are some other thoughts:

- Could you talk a little bit more about Quartz as a socialite?  It seems that she is warm and charming, but does she go to a lot of events?  Cause it is also implied that she is a recluse as well, and a bit difficult to interact with.  What does the general public think of her?  The Gentry?  How does she work in a team?

- How did Signy get into the princess's party?  It doesn't seem like she is important enough to be at such an exclusive event.  Was she a scientist working on Arcadia Station, and got caught up in the chaos of the coup?   I'd also like to know a little more about what Signy meant to Dany, since she seems really important to her, but we get almost no information on what she was like.   

- Shadow does appear in the app, but it could be beefed up a little more.  Some recommendations were: Quartz recharges her power faster in shadows, that her attacks are much more powerful in the shadows, her camouflage works the best in shadowy conditions, the 'shadow' of her personality looms closer than she thinks (as you hint at with the Lavender Lemonade paragraph), or that, like Dr. Tomoe in the anime, she likes to do her mad science in the shadows of her labratory (and scares her assistants because they didn't realize she was there). 

- Tiny typo - You mention Adonis in the "Sunlight" like when you probably meant Psyche. 

-  We need to make sure that the Fuku you used for Quartz matches up with the official Iron Angels fuku template...which I didn't include in the Iron Angels app yet.  So this is 200% my bad and not a mark against the app.  I'm sure we can incorporate most of the elements of Quartz's costume, especially the cloak and hat.


There are two things that I found when I reviewed the app that the reviewers didn't bring up, so I'll mention them here:

In the Personality section, you mention a terrible accident that scarred her face, which made me confused and think that she had a hole in her head for a while.  In the Appearance though, you say that she has artistic scarring (megacool).  So I'd fix the Personality section for that part to reflect that the scars are intentional, or at least were made to look intentional.  Sin certainly would not want one of her honeys to look like damaged goods!

What does Quartz think about Sin, and about her mission as an Iron Angel? 

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To reviewers, this app rode the line between Accept, But and Revise, But.  My executive decision is that it is a Revise, But, since there are so many elements that need clarification.  But it is not like the core part of the character is broken - Quartz is a bombastic character on her own, we just need to hammer down her talents and history.  So you don't need to resubmit the app to the forums again - just let me know when you have made changes, and I'll review it with you to make sure all of the clarifications were made.  After that, we can add her to the cast tables and throw a party.

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Stuff that reviewers loved:

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The tie between botany/poison and the gluttony sphere is awesome and I love how you focused on the gluttony sphere when (in my opinion) the easier route would have been to stick more to the shadow sphere.

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I love her appearance! She is not your stereotypical beauty -- the scarification is awesome and fascinating. She really works as a Grigori, too, with her unusual appearance and ability to consume food and camouflage herself.

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I like that Lamya is beauty in a form we haven't seen yet, and totally juxtaposes what would be a sweet, appealing appearance with a less-than-friendly personality. I love her two-sidedness, and her way of playing around with people.

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I love how Dr. Lamya completely embraces her mad scientist self from valuing her lab creatures and caring about them more than her assistants to the fact everything she does is for the Greater Scientific Cause!



Questions/blockers:

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I do see how you were incorporating shadow through the photo-sensitivity, but I think that may have been too strong. Sin probably isn't going to leave that big of a malfunction in one of her Iron Angel since it would make her waaay too vulnerable to the resistance. (Sailor Psyche and her light based spheres would probably give Quartz nightmares ...) So maybe tone it down so that her camouflage enhancement doesn't work well during the day? Plus that'll let Quartz show off her nifty body mods.

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Need more clarification around human interactions - at the moment Lamya reads as a mad scientist who prefers to hide in her super secret lab and a pox on anyone that might keep her from that.

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I'm not sure I caught what Lamya's *real* role is. Her role as medical adviser/food critic is established, but does that feed into what she does for Sin at all? I get the impression she's there to come up with new and fun poisons for Sin to use when needed, when she's not intercepting/decoding Resistance transmissions, but a little clarification on that wouldn't hurt.


Additional Thoughts:

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Also, maybe instead of (or in addition to) being a nutritionist, she sells tea/candy/pastries/something comforting that everyone loves (this could tie into the Sweeties as well) - which would draw in the senshi and the S-cube folks. Who doesn't love a cinnamon bun? And maybe she also collects "specimens" that way too?

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Does she have any particularly favorite foods/cuisines?

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She can infiltrate the human world much more deeply than either of the other current Iron Angels, already having a reputation and status as a food reviewer. And there is plenty of opportunity for interaction and conflict with Kivan and Seren.

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Application Reviews / Re: Sailor Quartz//Dr. Lamya bint Sullivan
« on: December 06, 2013, 02:11:47 PM »
Thank you for the submission, Brenna! 

Everyone else should be receiving the form to complete this review momentarily.  Then, a verdict will be given back in this thread on Friday, Dec. 13th (spooky). 

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The Gloriana's Lounge / Re: Iron Angel story?!!!
« on: December 02, 2013, 11:40:26 AM »
Starting kinda backwards with the questions.

So for the 7-year anniversary, for sure Sin gives an annual speech on Eurydice extolling the awesome virtues of the Angels (this will correspond with the opening stories taking place on Eurydice).  The Angels don't have to be there, but there will be talk of them and maybe retrospectives of some of their big accomplishments. 

I kinda like the idea of Seren being like "TAKE THE HAIR OUT", if Pixie thinks that Kivan's heart can handle it :D  It'll give the scene a bit of tension and especially since they are dealing with ex-Resistance, it might look nearly like an early sign of rebellion.

We can consider Iron Angels as being as unique as people are, physiology-wise, so how she wakes up can really be up to you.  Sin would ideally want the wake-up to be as seamless as possible, but maybe Seren needs to flex her fingers to get numbness out, or tries to yawn but realizes she doesn't need to.  If anything feels really strange, it might be the Sailor Crystal in her chest area, but that would dim out over time. 

She should have a wireframe explanation of what her enhancements are, but might have specific questions for Sin.  It might also be fun if Seren is asked to demonstrate some of those powers to make sure they are working - Kivan could always start with an example of his. 

Pixie, any opinions on banter/no banter?  I think I like the idea of some banter, personally, and let Seren start waking up partway through it. 

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The Gloriana's Lounge / Iron Angel story?!!!
« on: November 27, 2013, 10:14:57 AM »
Wanted to create a dumping spot for ideas for a Sin, Seren, and Kivan story! 

I had an idea that maybe Sin and Kivan are present when Seren wakes up as an Iron Angel for the first time.  Are we interested in that idea?  If so, we'll want to figure out how to frame it, like if the story should start with Seren waking up, or if we want Sin and Kivan to banter first (possibly about if there are any other changes to Seren they want to make before starting). 

Hey Ru, do you think Seren was manufactured bald, or chose to be that way?  Cause that might be a bit funny, if she looks at the hair that Kivan put on for her and is like "NOPE, NOT MY STYLE, TAKE IT ALL OFF".  Sin will back you up, dearie. 

If we want to pursue other ideas, we can :D Also, we could include the three bodyguards in Iron Angel stories too.  I think for game-start, Iron Angels will probably be busy with their 7-year anniversary of being a team, and also busy hunting down the pesky Resistance groups. 

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Welcome to Arcadia! / Re: Chat Announcements!
« on: October 17, 2013, 09:15:16 AM »
Quicky chats for this weekend to announce some news!  At most, it would be an hour of actual game talk, and people can choose to hang around after that or not.

Saturday, October 19th - 3 PM PST

Sunday, October 20th - 3 PM PST

If I don't see you there, I'll catch up with you.

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Welcome to Arcadia! / Re: Welcome to SUBACCOUNTS
« on: October 06, 2013, 06:21:26 PM »
So things are still weird!  But we now have the "Switch Accounts" box above our shoutbox!  Yay!  Fixes to the layout and the profile are to come :D

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Multimedia / Re: Icons for the planets!
« on: October 05, 2013, 11:41:47 PM »
Both are up now!  For Penth, I really responded to the pink building picture, actually - I thought the old, broken stairs were very beautiful, and spoke to the sad beauty that I do associate with that world.  The people try hard to make the place vibrant and lively, but can't help that the place is falling apart around them.

Thanks guys! 

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Application Reviews / Re: Sailor Topaz // Dr Kivan Arji
« on: October 01, 2013, 09:36:29 PM »
Wheeee for Kivan.  He gets an ACCEPT, BUT.

He is a total balls to the wall villain, and best of all, he chose to be that way in the pursuit of eternal youth.  The reviewers appreciated that he had stuff to strut and was such a bright example of an Iron Angel, and also appreciated his angel personality as being cold, fixated, and in some ways, zealous.  Reviewers loved his devotion to Sin, and thought he'd be pretty brutal towards the poor widdle Revolutionary Senshi.

The major crit of Topaz was actually of the Kivan personality - reviewers understood that he was a 'mask' of Topaz, but still didn't think there was enough consistency between the Topaz and Kivan halves.  Particularly, reviewers said that they need to be sold more on Topaz as an actor, because there isn't enough in his backstory or likes/dislikes/hobbies that would suggest that he could mask his personality well enough to pass as Kivan.  For one thing, OCD and being an actor seemed inconsistent (being so methodical and creative at once), and that gap should be closed, or else exposed as a potential weakness.  Reviewers also had some questions that might help distinguish between the two personalities, which can be seen below.   

His likes/dislikes/hobbies are a good candidate for being reformed, to get more of the acting tie-in.  His like for symmetry and dislike of disorder is repetitive, especially since disorder also features in Seren's app - definitely keep symmetry, since that is more specific to his career.  Pursuing more about pride in the L/D/H could also help too.

So the emphasis is that Topaz/Kivan is fine in terms of who he is, but we could use more definition between who Kivan and Topaz are in the personality and other descriptions.  He is 100% good in terms of the Angel side, we just need to cinch in the alternate personality, and we are fine.  He is Accepted, and we'll hash out the rest before you get into stories (I WANT A STORY). 

(Also Seren and Kivan will both be added to the cast list tomorrow!) 

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[Topaz is awesome because] The fact that a) so far he's our only male PC antagonist, b) he's a wonderful little peacock and c) he's actually really devoted to Sin.

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I think the most vivid part of this character is his Iron Angel form-- his abilities not only make sense from his personality & sphere, but they are potentially devastating for the Revolutionary Senshi & can easily work in multiple plot situations. Topaz works very well as a man who was so ruled by his fear of death he transformed himself into a soulless machine. I get why he became an Iron Angel, which I think is very important to establish if the character isn't forced into the role.

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The idol worship, the extremity of the classic Arrogant Doctor trope, and the little obsessions add up to something that you can see appealing to Sin and her world-view.

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I feel as if this [division between Kivan and Topaz personalities] is easily interjected into the application— like if Kivan is a great actor, perhaps this can be drawn out in the likes/dislikes/hobbies to better integrate who the character is. Maybe he is a theater nut, constantly nitpicking subpar performances and arguing about inferior stage design. Or if Topaz is charming and light and bright, Kivan, without the face of an angel, comes across as bombastic and prideful and as a big fat jerk. I really like there being a difference between the two personas, I just don’t see enough of it in the app as it stands now.


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I'd like some hint of what would happen if he was humiliated. His worst failing is pride, so how does it feel when his pride is challenged.

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How would you have the Kivan persona react, outwardly, to a someone uttering anti-Sin propaganda to his face?

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Is there a persona/mask that Topaz does not like putting on?

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